When Akio and his mother move across the country to live with a mysterious acquaintance of his dead father, it's an adjustment. When they learn that the man's wife is dead and his son hasn't left the house in years, it's a shock. When the son starts letting Akio in on the rest of the family's secrets, things really start to get weird. It's going to be a long winter.
Wow, it's my old friend Awkward-Looking Speed Lines! Haven't seen you in a while!
Not to continue to call attention to my mistakes, but you see that book on the floor in the 2nd panel? That's Akio's book from way back on page 14. He took it with him, but I don't think that's super evident because there are books and crap all over the room, you can only see it a few time. And pssst, also I forgot to draw him holding it on a few pages, but let's keep it a secret, okay? I can go back and fix that before anyone finds out...O^O
Sorry for the sloppiness, guys! Thanks for sticking with me anyway!
(Also, I didn't plan it to be like this necessarily, but 6 is totally just like "I'm just gonna baaaaack away now..." xD)
By all means, over-analyze away!! 8D That is like the best thing for someone trying to tell a story of some sort to hear. You give me a bit too much credit with the panel layouts, it is partially for dramatic effect but also partially because I am desperately trying to find ways to make seven pages of two guys sitting around and talking not completely boring. orz;;;
"It's partially for dramatic effect, but also...trying to find ways to make seven pages of two guys sitting and talking not completely boring."
Hey, real storytellers are supposed to think like that! For comics in particular, it's that tough balance of fulfilling a storyline's particular needs (e.g. pacing) while still making an eye catching composition that can stand on its own.
Or at least, that's how I see the the art of comics, anyway. *Shrugs*
As for your "mistake with the book" (*Coughs*)...don't feel bad about it! Artists are forever practicing, you know? If you ever read a famous artist's earlier works, I'm sure you'd catch the difference in progress!
The most important part is that you now know how to fix that mistake; along with a better idea of how introduce an "Chekov's Gun" (Google it) in future pages/stories.
I'm in love with panel 7's background, by the way. It's great how you're playing with the panels' camera angle--zooming in, zooming out--whenever you sense its necessary. *Grins*